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I'm Bleeding| theshamanicprincess |
Posted: Mar 5 2005, 11:42 PM
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 Archangel  Group: Members Posts: 77 Member No.: 4 Joined: 5-March 05  |
I Don’t know me anymore
I’ve lost sight of who I am I can’t find my self in the mirror I can’t find my soul deep inside What is happing to me? I don’t have a purpose I don’t have a meaning But I’m bleeding Where is the blood coming from? Is it my heart so long lost? Is it my flesh torn apart? I’m bleeding I lost my self so long ago In the shadow of humanity It slipped form my clasp And slithered away... Where am I? Who am I? What am I? And why am I bleeding? Where is the blood coming from? Is it form what u did to me? Is it from what I’ve done to u? I’m bleeding What is happening to me? I’m bleeding -------------------- though i'm closer to wrong
i'm no further from right and now i'm convinced on the inside that something's wrong with me convinced on the inside ur so much more than me  |
 
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| drk_wn65 |
Posted: Mar 5 2005, 11:46 PM
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 Administrator Group: Admin Posts: 73 Member No.: 1 Joined: 5-March 05 |
i still love it. it's wonderful. keep doing great, alright?
-------------------- .†.i don't know how many more times i can pick up the shattered pieces of my life without cutting myself for the last time.†. |
  
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| Sputin |
Posted: Oct 13 2005, 04:37 AM
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...despite my soul screaming out to burn you because this sounds Emo, it is a good poem. {nodsnods} Structure is good, and it flows well.
That verse threw it off a little, I think. The spelling error and use of text talk just kinda tinted the mood you were trying to create. A definite thing to avoid, in future. -------------------- I r teh Sputi!
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| theshamanicprincess |
Posted: Oct 14 2005, 10:45 PM
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Archangel Group: Members Posts: 77 Member No.: 4 Joined: 5-March 05 |
dont ever call anything i do EMO or u will piss the fuck out of me...
that one i typed in word pad...not microsoft word...in mw i have changer so that it fixes the text talk....i normally dont revise poems to much b4 i post them b/c thats one of the reason i post them...i want ppl to pic out all my errors and to help me improve. -------------------- though i'm closer to wrong
i'm no further from right and now i'm convinced on the inside that something's wrong with me convinced on the inside ur so much more than me |
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