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 MELENDEZ, ALEXANDRA
ALEXANDRA MELENDEZ
Posted: Nov 2 2009, 02:58 AM


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ALEXANDRA ' A.L ' MELENDEZ
Head strong, I'll take you on, head strong I'll take on anyone.

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name: Tori.
age: 21
gender: Female.
contact:lettyortlz @ AIM.
time zone: Eastern Standard Time.
other characters: Nada.


( I DREAM OF YOU DRAPED IN WIRES ! )
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full name: Alexandra Louise Melendez.
name meaning: 'Man's defender' and is of Greek Origin.
nicknames: A.L., Alex, AL. (Do not call her Alex, her grandmother only calls her that.)
age: 29.
date of birth: August 4th.

blood type: B.
sexuality: Straight.

affiliation: Civilian, Former officer of the Boston Police Department.
position/occupation(s): Bartender.

pet(s): A cat namedd Muffin.
mode of transportation: Subway, or a Nissan 240 of the year 1998, she's pretty good with mechanics.
personal wealth: Teetering from middle to lower class, she's sort of in between.


( I LEAVE YOU WITH RESTLESS LIARS ! )
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hair color & style: Dark brown curls that fall just at mid-back along with light and wispy bangs at her forehead.

eye color: Brown.
skin tone: Olive.
height & weight: 5'4, 125 pounds.
build: Athletic and slender. (Though she does proclaim she eats like a pig.)
scars & tattoos: Nada.
accent: Massachusetts and a little bit of New Jersey.
clothing style: Laid back, instead of her usual police uniform, the young woman relies on comfy yet some-what fitted pairs of jeans and wife beaters with boots to get her through the day to day life.

play-by: Michelle Rodriguez.


( I WILL STRIDE YOU WITH DESIRE OF FAULT LINE ! )
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likes:
- Guns
- Sex
- Hand to hand combat.
- music
- children
- conflicts
- men
- Southerns or Irish boys.
- cats
- dogs
- animals in general
- feeling safe.
- rain
- knowing her daughter Amy is safe.


dislikes:
- Spiders
- when a child is harmed.
- civilians being harmed or in danger.
- keeping her mouth shut.
- bad days
- romantic movies
- nail polish
- when her car breaks down
- crime
- hold ups
- bad/drunk karaoke


strengths:
- hand to hand
- firearms
- fighting in general
- arguing
- winning an argument
- keeping her family safe
- good leader
- can out drink you underneath the table.
- good with her hands
- mechanics
- cars

weaknesses:
- can't keep her mouth shut
- often gets herself into trouble despite having a good head on her shoulders.
- children
- Amy
- Finn
- family
- starting fights
- good music
- taco bell
- olive garden
- bad boys

talents & special abilities:
- Good with cars and mechanics.
- Used to play the violin as a kid.
- Good with children.
- Can help people in any situation.

hobbies & interests:
- Swimming
- spending time with her child
- dancing
- firing range/target practice.
- scrap booking for her kid's 'magic' moments.

habits & quirks:
- scowls
- bites bottom lip
- fidgets
- hands on hips
- arms crossed over her chest.
- smirking
- rolling eyes back when angry, glaring.

dreams & desires:
- To one day fall in love with the right guy.
- find a good father figure for Amy, till then she's independent and can do whatever she wants to do and can do.

- for her daughter to go to school, get married someday, etc etc ,future goals.

fears:

- Petrified of spiders, too many legs.
- Losing her child.
- Losing her family.
- Getting someone shot on duty.
- Losing her life.
- Making mistakes.
- Feeling out of place in a social situation or conversation.
- People.


personality:


Growing up with an older brother could have been a bad thing, but instead Alexandra Melendez embraced it by being a tomboy. She didn't fancy any dresses or Barbie dolls but instead had grown fond of running around, climbing trees and doing anything that a regular daredevil might do. Gutsy to the core, Alex was almost always in trouble in school or at home despite getting along pretty well with her family. The only thing she found herself aware of was that she could never sit still, always fidgeted and almost always couldn't shut her mouth to some degree. It wasn't that she was a gossip queen but rather someone who always would speak her mind in any situation. Perhaps her mother was to blame for being stubborn in the first place, which gave her daughter plenty of room to be like her.

Another trait of Alex is her honesty. She can be blunt, sarcastic and rather dry at times in any bad situation. If it was a good situation she'll try to poke fun at it in order to keep her and anyone else in that good mood. Don't ask her how your new hair-cut is, or what your shoes really look like. She'll tell you flat out the truth with no sugar coated answers. Maybe that's why people refer to her as a bad ass and not just another 'chick' in the world. But since when did speaking your mind give you the reputation of a trouble maker? This didn't bode well with her and never has, considering that she hates stereotypes and will ignore them at any given time.

Her dreams and ambitions are a big part of who she is, Alex is a go-getter and will stop at nothing until she gets what she wants, or in some cases what she needs. One of those goals being that someday the young woman wanted to have a child. Which brings me to the next thing of her. Maternal. With wanting a child comes the responsibilities in life, she used to babysit for her little cousins and some friends, always wondering what it would be like to have one of her own someday. According to her mother, she would one day make a good mom for her very own children. Despite being on the more bitter side outlook of life, Melendez tries to find the good in people even if there isn't anything that forces her to, she tries to treat everyone with respect as long as she gets it in return.

The final thing about her is that she doesn't wear her heart on her sleeve. You can't really tell what she's thinking or feeling unless Alex wants to show you. If you don't know her she's quite a hard book to read and might leave you guessing. When you become her friend, she will respect you immediately as long as you respect her in return. She's not quick in trusting people, it takes time to get to know her even if you've been a friend for a while it's her family who really sees the real Alexandra. She's not exactly a good advice giver and isn't the one you want to ask on opinions unless you want the honest to God truth.



( I TEACH YOU OF DEATH'S DESIRES ! )
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parents: Paulo Melendez, 65, Retired mechanic.
Rosa Melendez, 67, retired secretary.

siblings:
Vinny Melendez, 34, garage owner (took over in his father's footsteps.)
other: Amy Melendez, 3, daughter.
family wealth: Lower class.

ethnicity: Dominican, Puerto Rican.
birthplace: (where born, regardless of how long they lived there)
hometown: (where they spent most of childhood)

history: in-depth: (Got permission from Finn's player. wink.gif)

Alexandra Louise Melendez was born on August 2nd in Boston, Massachusetts to Paulo and Rosa Melendez. Particularly because Boston was so cold some days and rainy others, Alex learned to hate it there and always longed to be somewhere else. Home to the Red Sox, home to every damn day that sucked in her opinion, this was where she would grow up. A few years later Alex would be kicked out of six Jr. High schools until she finally cleaned up her act while attending her freshman year of high school under the impression that she wouldn't become anything if she didn't graduate. The advice paid off but hadn't fully kicked in. Exceptional in the art department, she studied aboard in her college years in Ireland.


There she would meet a young man by the name of Finn. While Alex wasn't exactly the type to throw herself at men, she did take it as an invite to a fling. The two parted ways when she came back to Boston and switched majors into criminal justice. She would then go on to becoming a police officer for the Boston PD. Things seemed to be perfect, she had met a man by the name of Danny who would go on to becoming her boyfriend and partner. Months would pass before she finally left the force after injuring an officer in the line of duty. Danny would be that person as she had been guilt ridden and more importantly, scared for the situation. He'd try to come back in her life and it was all right until things started to get worse the minute Alex told him she was pregnant.

He'd leave her and she'd go on to becoming a single mother. With the help of her family, Melendez was able to secure a job at a local bar while they watched her daughter, Amy. Things seemed to be going better for her with her two part time jobs, the bar and her brother's garage. By the time Amy was three years old, Danny tried to come back into her life but she declined him on the spot. It was unclear whether or not things were going to get better or worse, especially when her father was diagnosed with cancer. It took a while to recover from the news but she keeps on going regardless of how she really feels. The only thing she was concerned about was her family, no one else mattered. It explained how Alex had no friends and had distanced herself from the bar goers and co-workers outside of work.

Securing an apartment through the aid of child support and her steady income would give Amy just what she needed. However with the crime rate going higher and higher she was losing more and more of her former friends in the force. This left a big impact on her as Danny had gone undercover and was killed in the line of duty. She began to distance herself further from the world, someday wanting to find a way out. Little did she know that maybe someone else would come back into her life and make everything right again for her and her little girl.



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Well weren't they sites for sore eyes. Rain Ocampo, otherwise known as Missy Sanchez had stepped into the bar only to be greeted by the tender and up-nodded towards him. "Hey, Frank." that rasp of a voice exhaled. It was clear she was a regular here and probably out drank anyone in the bar. However seeing Alice was something she did not expect and took a seat next to the auburn headed beauty. "Come here often?" the woman would smirk as it disappeared when she saw someone in the background watching them. Tipping her head to the side as if to crack her neck left to right, Ocampo had indicated with that head tilt that there was a man in the back of the bar that was smoking a cigarette and looked pretty shady. "I think I'll take a rain check on that drink, Frank." she smiled faintly, he knew something was up and immediately reached for the shotgun underneath the bar but Rain placed her hand on a car magazine as if to signal for him to stop, he was being suspicious and she knew that.

When you were undercover it was best to always have a look out, Frank was just that. Someone she could trust, someone who had once worked with her late boyfriend, J.D. and was now living in the city ironically enough. "How's the magazine?" she held it up to him and pointed to the Corvette. "Looks pretty cool, huh?" the tomboy smiled, giving Carlos enough time to get out if he chose so. She and Alice would probably try to stay till things got bad or the Umbrella operative approached them. She was aware that Oliveira was here but didn't make any sudden moves to show that she was going to greet him. It was probably a bad move to hang around Alice as well but the girls needed to stick together.

It wasn't until the television started playing an Umbrella Corporation and a man in the background started to get rowdy as Rain took the magazine and placed it on the desk. The Umbrella operative in the back suddenly saw the man who was extremely drunk and headed towards him just as Frank reached for the shot gun once more. It was then that she trusted Alice would take her leave, when the Latina took her own, out the back way. Things were about to get ugly, an innocent man was about to die. No one was in the bar except for the old fogies and they seemed to get the hell out of dodge as well. At least that snoopy reporter wasn't around again to make matters worse. She cringed at the thought and then against her own orders, started back into the bar.

"Missy, thought you were leaving?" Frank said suspiciously. "C'mon, pops, no need to talk about them." trying to usher the drunk man to safety as Frank let his grip tighten on the shot gun underneath the bar, looking instead like he was polishing glasses considering no one on the other side could see what he was doing. "Stay away from me!" the old man yelled loudly, attempted to throw his beer glass at the Spanish girl. Rain glared at him and then looked to the other man who had advanced toward the older man.

No he was useless.

"Looks like it might rain tonight." the Umbrella operative smirked and nodded to Rain as he began out the door.

Oh shit.

Someone came towards her, it was Jon.

"I'm fine." Rain shouldered him off, as if brushing his presence away from her. She never liked when people were concerned about her, the brunette could take care of herself. When he persisted however, Ocampo gave him a look that meant business. "I said, I'm fine." she hissed. It wasn't his place to make her feel lovey dovey right now, there was no need for it. "There's something down there." the woman exhaled, unaware if Alice and Carlos were behind them or not. K-Mart, well she didn't like kids and maybe if her and J.. had some that would be the only way she'd like em'. Jon on the other hand didn't have that soft quality to him that J.D. did and even if it was something different, the two of them could not be replaced as hard as she'd try. But her personal shit had to get out of the way, grabbing onto the gun at her thigh holster did the girl make sure that the holster had been concealed with her leather jacket and cocked the gun to the side. "I'm on it." she muttered, not hesitantly however and began to head down the alley way. Ain't no one gonna' tell her no. She'd do it her way or no way.

Another gunshot went off and her body would immediately swing to the side, stepping around a corner and her gaze and aim would stop dead on the figure on the ground. Gawking at it she never turned her back and instead kept her gun aimed down at the man's forehead. It had been the same guy with the 'dog bite' at the bar. "Please..." the man had said with a frown. "I... I'm sick, t-tried to... " sputtering out. It had been clear that the man had tried to take his own life and there had been his own sidearm on the ground, but instead of it being armed the bullets were scattered every which way. Rain swallowed hard. "Who bit you?" she asked, still having the gun trained on him. It was a matter of fact statement rather than a question. "You mean the dog?" the man asked, confused and repulsed by her question of who. "Don't get cute with me, who fuckin' bit you." she growled, leaning forward to get closer aim at him but didn't get too close to him so that he could get the gun out of his way.

"A man... down the street, he was nuts!" the male started to rant. "It just hurts like a bitch...wait a minute, how do you know so much?" he insisted with a scowl. "That's none of your business." Ocampo sighed. "If you're sick, then go to the hospital don't try to commit suicide, pussy." the woman snapped at him. All she needed was for someone to calm her down. "You were bitten." was all Rain said as she proceeded to pull the trigger.

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ALEXANDRA MELENDEZ
Posted: Nov 2 2009, 03:57 AM


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AVA MALONE
Posted: Nov 3 2009, 12:52 AM


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Welcome to the site and thanks for applying!

Overall she looks good. The only thing I'd like to see is for you to run it through a spellcheck and give it another look over as there were several awkward phrases and wrong uses of words. 'Families' versus 'family's' 'persuing' when I think you meant 'perusing', things like that. Also, there were several weird transitions that could probably use some more information, so just take a look and see what you can find.

Simply reply here when you've made corrections.

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ALEXANDRA MELENDEZ
Posted: Nov 3 2009, 02:08 AM


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..oh fuck me. It was like 3 am... this is embarrassing lol. Thank you though. Give me time, however I'll say I'm more visual, if that makes sense. Can you pin point where the awkward phrasing is? The RP sample is good I assume, I just need more direction here. Thanks Mouse! smile.gif

Edit: Fixing the personality, and the whole 'namedd' ...yeah uh no.
MORDECAI PEPPERS
Posted: Nov 3 2009, 02:21 AM


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I'm sure if you took another look with a clear head you'd see it. For example, odd transitioning here 'Funny, she seemed to have a thing for the Irish. Melendez accidentally signaled too soon for her and her partner to go in for a bank robbery, as she had made SWAT and got him injured.' in the history.

'They hadn't been able to deal with each other and she had issues with herself.'

' Rather it be running, sex or fighting, she's always in tip top shape in mind and body.'

It's throughout, so I can't pinpoint every area, but like I said take a look and you should be able to find them.

Thanks. Let me know if you have any further questions.


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