Reality Shock, my sequel to the ds dark series

[stormrider 5661]

First off, I havn't been on in a while so I'm going to post this story to make up for it.
Second: this is my first fan fic so I need you guys to give me feedback on it
and Third, this takes place in the world of the ds dark, in winter of 2007. this may be a sort of novel when I'm done, so stay patient with me. here is reality shock....

Reality shock: Part I: Dark Death, Chapter One, The Wii
It was the best day of my life, I had saved enough money for the new wii console and was waiting in line to check out the one I was going to buy. I got to my car but it wouldn't start, so I had to call a tow truck and wait. I decided to sit on the nearby bench while I waited. I held on tightly to the wii box as I shivered from the cold, I had put on a light jacket since I was only going to run in the store, buy a wii and red steel, then run back out. Eventually the truck came and I pointed him to my car. I almost pointed to another one since it's owner was my obnoxious co-worker, but I held back. went back to get my wii, but it was gone! what was left in it's place was a local newspaper about the mysterious deaths of wii owners that died from gun shots without bullets, sword strikes when the nearest owner is across the county, and many other mysterious ways of death. It also had a headline on the front page about a psycho calling himself the unknown hunter. He said he defeated a man called dark death and stoped the threat of the "ds dark." many people didn't believe him (with a story like that. who could?) but something in my gut told me to trust what he said...

[stormrider 5661]

Reality Shock: Chapter Two, The Hunter and His Warning

I did a quick search for my wii since I didn't just pay $250 to have it stolen from me. I quickly found my red steel game under the bench, but it was different, the colors were switched on the case and it had a sticker with a red skull on it where the rating was. I checked the back and found it was also color inverted and had the sticker over the rating. But the content advisory box had "death" where the normal "violence" and "blood and gore" words usually go. I just shruged and put it in my bag. I stood up and found my wii where I left the newspaper, only it's colors were inverted too and had the sticker where "nintendo" was printed. I turned around to see the tow truck driving awaywith my car. I knew I would have to call for a ride, and sue that driver. No sooner when I sat back on the bench did a rock, or other hard object, hit my head and made me dazed. I caught a glimpse of a younger man pick me and my posessions up before I was unconcious. I woke up on a soft red sofa with my wii on the table next to me. I looked at it to see the box only half of the box color inverted. The skull sticker was violently flashing in random dark colors, but a hand put a cloth around the box before I could mentally process what was going on. I sat up slowly, with my head feeling like a hammer is constantly hitting it where the rock did. "relax, I hit you harder then I needed to" a gentle voice told me. "It seems you are now the unlucky owner of an....infected... wii. They are popping up more and more each week, let alone each day." A green beverage was nearly thrown at me while "drink it" was said. "So stormrider, looks like it's your turn to be the hunter"
"I'm not stormrider, my name is P-"
"Thats not important right now. Your hunter name is stormrider"
"Hunter name? Sounds a bit cheesy."
"I don't make these up storm... ok your probably wondering why your here, I guess I should explain to you whats happening."
"you might want to hurry before I fully wake up, I still don't know you..."
"how could I forget? you may know me as the unknown hunter. Now to why your here. An ancient cult called dark death formed in the past to perform darkness rituals to empower them so they may torment the world so they can rule it. But a fight broke out causing most of the members to be destroyed. Years passed and a few of the members discovered how to put their spirits into video game systems so they may carry their dark deeds." the last few words were distorted as I suddenly went unconcious again.

[stormrider 5661]

Reality Shock: Chapter 3, Dan and Dark Death
*spoiler alert...warning, read after you have read the ds dark series (unless you don't want to, this sums it all up in a less descriptive way)...spoiler alert*

I woke up again, only on a bed this time. "You know, next time I tell you to drink something, do it before you spill it on my couch." Another Drink was handed to me, only it was still bubbling like it was freshly brewed. "Now then, back where I left off. Dark Death had to be stopped so a band of hunters formed to stop them. We had to somehow trap these evil spirits and prevent them from harming anyone. One of those hunters had connections to a designer at nintendo. So we decided to...ask....for designs for future systems so we could make our own version of it. instead of being a regular system, it had a mini prison cell in it where the spirit would be forced to inhabit until the end of time, or when the system was destroyed. unfortunately, one of them found how to escape and use the unique design of our system to lure people into taking it home. I challenged that member but I lost. But one of their rogue members brought me back to finish the job. I stopped him before he hurt one more person but many were already dead. But Dan has returned for his revenge and it is up to you to stop him"
"you mean that my friend is an evil demented cult member bent on ruling the world?"
"nah, that one is flipping burgers at mcdonalds or burger king now. this Dan is a completely different person"
"are you spying on me..."
"I'm a hunter, I spy on EVERYONE"
"rriiight..., its just me isn't it"
"pretty much, just to ensure you stay safe, your father asked me to watch over you when you were born"
"you knew my father?"
"he was a fellow hunter"
"who's father isn't.."
"just the reader's"
"who?"
"nevermind, inside joke. ok, no more 3rd wall-breaking, moving on...lets see, discussed the cult, hunters, dan... that seems to be it." I took a sip from the drink since the bubbles were calming down. I suddenly felt adrenaline rush through me and my not-so-perfect vision allowed me to see perfectly without glasses. I could actually see the unknow hunter now. But he was wearing a black cloak so I couldn't see his face. I noticed that my clothes were slowly transfoming into my own black cloak from my neck down. My wound seemed to not hurt anymore, but I felt sick. "keep it down or the affects will wear off" I suddenly felt myself seeming shorter, and younger. "the potion makes you at the perfect age for you to be a hunter, the only problem is you still grow older but retain your young look."
"does this mean I still get arthritus?"
"yup, now for the fun part, you get to be knocked out again!"
"WHAT!?!"
He quickly pulled out a club and tried to hit me in the head, I quickly dodged him with new speed.
"Very good storm"
"I'm not stormrider! Call me P-" He hit and knocked me out before I finished the sentence.
Realityshock: part II, The Awakening, coming soon!

[Zen]

wow, you sure do work hard making this. I used to work hard making my FF, but I got lazy

[Jaffffey]

This story kind of reminds me of my story " wii will kill you". I posted this story on this site and someone deleted it I was so mad

[inuyasha man]

wo its jaffey i havent seen youfor moths on this site hi!

[stormrider 5661]

This post is here for two reasons, A. bumping the topic, evil I know
and 2. to post a quick update on the series if you liked it, I will start adding the new chapters soon and may make a PDF file for the the different parts of and maybe entire series when its done.

[Mo.MPrime]

hey,
nice to see u back