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|Naruto Jiyuu > Ninja Registration > Shukun Kai|
|Posted by: anubus Jul 1 2007, 04:58 AM|
| Character Name:Shukun Kai
Rank What rank you want to start as. (Genin)
Character Age: 12
Character Height 5'4"
Characters Weight: 112
Starting Village (Hidden Mist)
Character Appearance: he has short brown hair with red highlights and style wise would be considered behead he has hazel eyes almost appear to change colors depending on the angle at which you see them but thats if you can get him to take off his sunglasses, he always wears sunglasses even it night he cliams his eyes are sensitve to light the sunglasses are sliver frame and have a aviator look to them but are a bt smaller.he has a very slender build ,but has broad and built shoulders for his size he wares a sleeve-less black t-shirt with a white vest which has a collar and on the back it has a shadow of a ninja with chains wrapped around his arms that turn into snakes he wares black pants with white stripes same with the shoes but with red shoe strings. And like the back of his vest he always keeps his chain wrapped around his arm and the hook is hooked to the other end of the chain that is attached to his wrist and forearm.
History: As he stared at the wall in front of him seeming to almost ignore his instructor he was asked to do once again another tech that he would never use. Mumbles this is stupid no Jutsu transforms then quickly transforms back. His instructor knew of his hard work he put into mastering his weapon but wondered why he did not have that focus on all techniques Kai was laid back and easy going for the most part and only worked hard at the things that interested him which got him in trouble allot within the time he spent in the academy. Kai...Kai Why cant you put forth the effort reminding him about his child hood as he gazed off slowly going back to that time in his head, As a young boy he always watched his father training with the hook and chain he asked his father why not a sword or something that is more lethal than a hook. His father replied that their is more strategy behind this weapon then most others, there are countless things you can do offensively and defensively and I will teach you how to use it before you leave for the academy. So every day there after he would train with his father on how to use this weapon. Practicing on hitting targets, moving objects, pulling himself toward things and other things of that nature. At first he couldnít even grab on to a tree branch but with much practice he could climb a tree and retrieve things lying around him. The day before he left for the academy his father gave him a hook and chain of his own and said the day when he can use the hook and chain in combination with Fuuma Shuriken he will have truly mastered the art of this weapon. That night there was a terrible storm and he had a hard time sleeping and once he fell asleep he went into a dream about what he would do after the academy to come home and show his father how much better he is with the weapon that he gave him and maybe even take him on. he dreamt about the fight between him and his father and it was a glorious battle but then in the dream a shadow a appeared killed his father and vanished FATHER....he screamed as he awoke from his dream it was day the birds were chirping and the light glistened through the window even tho it was such a beatiful day smthing wasnt right he want don stairs and he was alone he searched his entire house but his family was nowhere to be found. Kai.....Kai....Kai listen to me, he is slowly brought back to the present Today is the day of graduation and you will never graduate if you donít put forth the effort when you are performing the techniques that fallow so at least this one time act like they are important to you.
Academy & Village Technique Chart
Bunshin no Jutsu (Clone Technique)
Description: This technique must be mastered by any ninja who has graduated from the Academy at the Hidden Leaf Village. It's the most basic technique a Genin must know, since it can be a real lifesaver. This ninjutsu creates an illusional clone of the user.
Henge no Jutsu (Transformation Technique)
Description: Henge no Jutsu is the basic skill a ninja must know to become a Genin. It is a very useful and widely used skill in the series, as it has many uses. It's mostly used as a decoy, to confuse the opponent by transforming into somebody that's an ally with the enemy.
Genjutsu Kai (Genjutsu Release)
Description: A Ninjutsu technique where the ninja focuses their chakra and screams "kai" or "release." They can perform it on themselves or on others. It will effectively ward off most Genjutsu, unless extremely powerful or when used in conjunction with an advanced bloodline.
Name: Weapon Mastery
Special Item: Melee weapon of choice, within reason.(Hook and chain)
Extra pack of either shuriken or kunai.(kunai)
Description: A long and difficult road awaits those who wish to use this style of combat, but those that are willing are well rewarded for their efforts. A form that revolves around perfecting the use of weapons in all their forms. From the early stages of projectiles to the later of whatever melee weapon the user wishes. Fighting a master of this style can prove to be a nightmare as they always seems to have a trick up their sleeve.
Pinpoint Accuracy Level 1
Description: An unusual trait for a fresh genin to have, almost perfect aim with a shuriken or kunai. Of course this skill comes in handy in more ways than one. At this level the user could hit the bullseye of a target 80% of the time.
Your Character will start off with 10 shruiken and 5(10) kunai.
(Hook and chain)
Starting Yen: Genin -- 500Y
side note: extra pack of kunai, starting weapon hook and chain(if allowed two of them)
|Posted by: Ds14 Jul 28 2007, 09:50 PM|
| I like this character, I like the bio, I like that you followed all the rules. I liked the originality with the narrative bio.
Here's what I didn't like:
The problem with a narrative bio is that it only gives a small amount of information about a character's life. Tell me more about his childhood and personality. It doesn't have to be long or detailed, but some information on it would be nice.
And paragraphs. Make a new paragraph if the subject changes or if someone finished talking.
If it weren't for the single block of text bio I'd have paseed this one. It shouldn't be too much work for you to get this through.