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Naruto Jiyuu > Technique Chart/Bloodline Registration > The Hokori Bloodline


Posted by: Hokori Mar 3 2007, 02:53 AM
Clan Name: Hokori
Name of Bloodline Technique: Hokori Bushido (meaning The Way of the Hokori Warrior.)
Description: (This bloodline is based off of the Saiyan race of good ol Dragon Ball Z)
The Hokori clan is a clan of intense warriors who focus on taijutsu and focus on supreme control of their body. To achieve full control the Hokori warriors train in controlling their chakra to further enhance their bodies. They manipulate their energy within themselves to make their attacks stronger and quicker. Higher levels of training will allow a massive burst of this energy to leave the body in the form of a blast. However, this leaves the warrior heavily fatigued. Also, there is a rare ability few have managed to achieve within the clan before they reach the master status. This ability allows them to “turn on” their chakras to allow full potential of their bodies to be released. This will increase everything of the warrior; he will be faster, stronger, have greater endurance, and greater chakra. Their bodies will be fully charged with energy which will energize the cells of the hair changing it to a golden color. The eyes will also undergo a change but the way it changes depends on the person.
Every member of the clan has black hair and eye color with usually no other hair on their bodies. Some however have the ability to grow facial hair. The bodies of the people within the clan are able to adapt quicker allowing for their muscles to become stronger with the more training received. Their cells within their bodies are able to retain and manipulate chakra allowing for such things as well as when someone recovers from immense damage or exhaustion they become even stronger.
The Hokori Clan take pride in themselves and their clan. They welcome fellow clansmen with open arms and have tough friendly rivalries. Outsiders would see the clan as a violent group of people always fighting and killing each other over the sake of fighting for fun. No one is usually killed from such fighting however. The desire for physical activity is great for a Hokori and the need to prove themselves in battle against a stronger opponent is something often sought after. They would rather fight a stronger opponent over a weak one.
  • Hokori Senshi (fighter) Title 1
    Type: bloodline
    Chakra: n/a
    Description: This person is a Hokori fighter meaning that they are slightly stronger and faster than a normal shinobi and can adapt faster to training.

  • Hokori Chakra Control Level 1
    Type: bloodline
    Chakra: n/a
    Description: User is able to manipulate up to 25% of their chakra into a single physical attack increasing its damage based on the amount of chakra placed into it. However, once 25% has been reached the user is forced to stop without risk of unconsciousness.

  • Hokori Fighting Style
    Type: Taijutsu
    Chakra: n/a:
    Description: The base level of Hokori Martial Arts. People at this level will have a very general knowledge of taijutsu and the skills to perform basic attacks. Basic martial arts level of a Hokori Warrior.

  • Hokori Bushi (warrior) Title 2
    type: bloodline
    chakra: 2,500
    Description: You are now much stronger and more agile than the best of gennins.

  • Hokori Fighting Style lv 2
    Type: taijutsu
    Chakra: 2,750
    Description: Your skill is now slightly above Tekken Taijutsu lv 1. However, your speed, strength and endurance are greater.


  • Hokori Chakra Control lv2
    Type: bloodline
    Chakra: 4,000
    Description: You can now manipulate 35% of your chakra into physical attacks. The more chakra in an attack the more impact it will have on the opponent. You can also achieve the tree/wall walking technique due to enhanced control over your chakra.

  • Hokori Fighting Style lv 3
    Type: taijutsu
    Chakra: 7,000
    Description: Your skill is now slightly above Tekken Taijutsu lv 2.Matching them in speed and endurance where they would be able to sprint for hours.

  • Hokori Kishi (Knight) Title 3
    type: bloodline
    Chakra: 7,000
    Description: Your ability to adapt to training is at its peak meaning you can learn techniques much quicker than anyone else. You are in excellent physical condition.

  • Hokori Chakra Control lv3
    Type: bloodline
    Chakra: 8,000
    Description: You can now manipulate 50% of your chakra into physical attacks. The more chakra in an attack the more impact it will have on the opponent. However, once 50% has been reached the user is forced to stop without risk of unconsciousness. If punching a boulder with a fist powered up with 50% of chakra it would crumble the rock into pieces.

  • Choujin Henshin (translates to superman transformation)
    type: bloodline
    Chakra: 10,000
    Note: Can achieve this technique after reaching the chakra requirement but also must meet a special requirement.
    Special Requirement: To achieve this technique you must have reached a state of powerful emotion whether it be grief, aggression, or pure happiness for example.
    Description: You are now able to unleash more potential from your body by charging your entire entity with chakra. Once achieved you will have a full round increase on everything such as speed, strength, chakra, endurance, focus, agility, and perception. However at first you will be almost completely out of control. You won’t be able to recognize friend from foe and challenge everyone to a fight to the death. You also will not be able to use this technique at will until you have learned full control which can only be achieved by Role Playing. Until you achieve control you will have to meet the special requirement every time and can only hold it for a very short period of time. Your appearance also changes; your hair rises a bit and turns a slight golden color, your eye color changes to a personal color, and a faint aura the same color as your eyes can be seen flowing around you.
    *Using this technique will cause immense strain on your body and is highly suggested to be used only in dire circumstances. After the limit has been reached and you power down your body will be heavily fatigued and near impossible to continue fighting.

  • Greater Choujin Henshin Control (translates to superman transformation)
    type: bloodline
    Chakra: 11,000
    Note: Can achieve this technique after reaching the chakra requirement but also must meet a special requirement.
    Special Requirement: To achieve this technique you must have achieved Choujin Henshin 5 times and Role Played about training to control it
    Description: You can now go Choujin Henshin at will and will no longer lose control. However Choujin Henshin can only be maintained for 1 minute per 1,000 chakra. Example: Chakra level of 15,000 means you can maintain Choujin Henshin for 15 minutes.
    *After the limit has been reached and you power down your body will be heavily fatigued and extremely hard to continue fighting.

  • Hokori Chakra Control lv4
    Type: bloodline
    Chakra: 12,000
    Description: You can now manipulate 60% of your chakra into physical attacks. The more chakra in an attack the more impact it will have on the opponent. If punching a boulder with a fist powered up with 60% of chakra it would shatter immediately. If a person was to be hit with this strength the person would be sent flying.

  • Hokori Fighting Style lv 4
    Type: taijutsu
    Chakra: 15,000
    Description: Your skill is now greater than Tekken Taijutsu lv 3. The speed of this level of fighting can only be seen as a blur to the untrained eye and can perform techniques surprisingly fast.

  • Hokori Kentoushi (Gladiator) Title 4
    type: bloodline
    Chakra: 15,000
    Description: Now once you reach a near death experience and recover your body will further adapt to prevent that pain and you will become stronger and faster.

  • Hokori Chakra Control lv6
    Type: bloodline
    Chakra: 20,000
    Description: You can now manipulate 75% of your chakra into physical attacks. The more chakra in an attack the more impact it will have on the opponent. However, once 75% has been reached the user is forced to stop without risk of unconsciousness. If punching a person with a fully powered punch of 75% chakra the impact would easily break the bone and knock them unconsciousness. A punch to the ground would cause it to split.

  • Hokori Meijin (Master) Title 5
    type: bloodline
    Chakra: 20,000
    Description: Your agility and precision nearly double.

  • Hokori Fighting Style lv 5
    Type: taijutsu
    Chakra: 25,000
    Description: Your skill is now greater than Tekken Taijutsu lv 4 and cannot be matched in single hand to hand combat alone. The speed of this level is frightening to any opponent against them. Also combined with other techniques of th Hokori Bushido makes a warrior at this level a dangerous one within their range.

  • Hokori Eiyuu (Hero) Title 6
    type: bloodline
    Chakra: 35,000
    Description: Perfect Physical condition unmatched by any other human being

  • Hokori Chakra Control lv7
    Type: bloodline
    Chakra: 40,000
    Description: You can now manipulate 100% of your chakra into physical attacks. The more chakra in an attack the more impact it will have on the opponent. If punching an average shinobi with a fully powered punch of 100% chakra the impact would kill them immediately

Posted by: Omega2042 Mar 3 2007, 03:54 AM
My first reaction to this chart was its length. While there is no set length a chart has to be, this just has too much stuff in it. You cover every aspect of taijutsu which is just too much for a single chart.

Next is just the strength of it. Its way too overpowered. By the time you would become a jounin, judged to be at 25K chakra, you fight on a level of a kage it seems. I am sure you can see why this is a problem.

Finally we come to all those chakra blasts. While this is technically possible, it wouldnt be for the level you have it down for. The basic idea behind doing this would be similar to a Rasengan, only just a blob of chakra. Also having to create the force behind it to fire it and have it deal damage to someone would take an unimaginable amount of chakra.

Next we move onto the SSj part of it. From everything we have seen in Naruto so far, forcfully increasing ones chakra causes an unimaginable strain on the body. Also once someone gets to the level where they arent berserk anyone, you can basically enter into gated status whenever you wish with no penelty.

Overall this chart is just way too overpowered to be used. You would have to edit it and make it weaker if you wish to have it accepted.

Posted by: Hokori Mar 3 2007, 05:15 PM
alright, i figured it might have been too strong. But i figured id put all my ideas down first then take it down from there. i took out the blasts and the ascended transformation thing. i also added a certain level of consequence for using the choujin henshin and increased the chakra level from 5k to 10k.

do i need to weaken it more or is this good enough?

Posted by: Ds14 Mar 3 2007, 06:25 PM
QUOTE (Omega2042 @ Mar 2 2007, 09:54 PM)
Finally we come to all those chakra blasts.  While this is technically possible, it wouldnt be for the level you have it down for.  The basic idea behind doing this would be similar to a Rasengan, only just a blob of chakra.  Also having to create the force behind it to fire it and have it deal damage to someone would take an unimaginable amount of chakra.

I know I'm not supposed to post here but that is kinda not true. A lot of the Rasengan's power seems to come from the spinning motion. Since this is imaginary, he could say the chakra had explosive force or something and then make damage proportional to the amount of strength/chakra/whatever.

I won't post again, but I will reply to that, Omega. I saw someone in an administrative position make an error based on incorrect facts and I corrected it. I don't know how else I could have done it. A PM wouldn't make much sense in this situation. A comment can be easily read and then deleted.

Posted by: Omega2042 Mar 4 2007, 04:09 AM
This might sound harsh, but when someone goes to make a bloodline the standards become higher. I read through this and I dont see how this is really a bloodline. What is the exact trait this bloodline gives?

Next is the jutsu on the chart itself. Its just way too strong. You basically have a character as fast as Gai and as strong as Tsunade. Thats way over the top. Of course this does depend on what the trait for this clan is.

As for DS, if you know you shouldnt post here, then dont do it. Saying you know you shouldnt do it before you post does not make it alright. Dont do it again.

Posted by: Hokori Mar 4 2007, 11:54 PM
i have decided to abandon this bloodline temporarily until i become more acquainted with the workings of this rpg.

in the meanwhile i think i will create a character with the Hyuuga bloodline.

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