bandage kyuu

Name: Bandage Kyuu
Clan: Bansoko clan
Type: ninjutsu mainly
Special Items: swords
Clan elements: anything but fire
Description: this clan uses the bandages ( also called gauze ) is used.
the gauze covering the clans bodies the gauze is part of them it takes almost no chakra to use naturally.

At the time child is born it is rapped in the bandages the parents press there chakra into there child the bandages creating a bond with the child and the gauze it is very risky 50% of the time the child dies from to much chakra in its body so quickly and the instant connection to the gauze.

At very young ages almost from the time the child walks they can use there bandages as appendages and can use other bandages if pulled to them also giving them more gauze. Soon the child can stretch the gauze to make it longer and thin it so they can hold more

The bond between the clan member and the gauze are like body parts skin if you please if it were all of the they would feel exposed, open to attack, scared, and like a part of them were missing. But as long as they can fell it with there chakra they feel alright.

Clan housing: The clan lives very close together and are thought of as one big family they are all brought up together cousins, brothers and sisters are all raised together. To offend one of them would anger the entire clan and if a sister was to fight with her cousin they would be highly chastened for the act. They are very family oriented.

The strongest male of the clan leads them as a figure head and as a counselor to all. he is called the “Ingrindain” He presides over the clan and has meetings every other week with the fathers of clan.

( this character an np only Kinbaku can use this np. )

The Ingrindain now is: Kasaru Bansoko he has mastered the bansoko farther than any before him.

When a member of the clan wishes to marry, he fiancé speaks with the Ingrindain and all the fathers or the “ The Hand of Ingrind” if the fiancé passes inspection he/she is accepted into the clan

The spouse is invited to all family meetings and is accepted into the family. But they cannot join The Hand of Ingrind only Bansoko fathers can be part of the Hand.

When a member of the family becomes genin they train with there father/mother ( whichever is a blood member of the clan ) for a year of training. And so forth with each rank.

If a member is band from the clan then they receive a mark from there gauze naturally as the Ingrindain sees fit this mark is not unlike the mark for the Hyuga clan but it makes the gauze on there body black and pains them to use the gauze.

At each rank a member (learns from his parent) a amount of jutsus they are as follows:


minor gauze buff
chakra: n/a
rank gennin
this ability acts as a small shock absorber taking about 5% out af an taijutsu attack.



regenerative gauze lvl 1
type ninjutsu
chakra n/a
rank gennin
user's gause heals minor injuries. like cuts, bruises, and scatchs. This jutsu heals over six hours.



hidden wrap
type ninjutsu
chakra: 500
rank gennin
User in one post before sends a tentacle of gause underground. in users next post it grabs the enemies leg holding them for one post. User must be able to see enemy it can be easily dodged if seen. ( it makes a mole hill as it goes.)
i don't know about the kick thing but it cant be pulled off how is that?



Bansoko bunshin no jutsu
chakra 5,500
rank gennin
takes amount of gause of body and turns it into a clone turns back into bandages when destroyed.



Bansoko kugutsu
Type: taijutsu
chakra: 7,500
rank gennin
User wraps opponent in gause hen lifting them off the ground, then slams opponent on the ground.

i got to this piont i did'nt have that much time i'll work more on it monday.

Bansoko shruiken
type ninjutsu
chakra: 2,500
Rank: genin
Folds gauze into shruiken shape and sharpened by chakra has though not as strond it is a good throwing weapon


You have to throw them by hand, though. Otherwise you could make a bunch and just shoot them out or whatever.


total mummifacation
type ninjutsu
chakra: 10,000
rank genin
The highest move genin can do it makes the gauze rap around the enemy into like a gauze cocoon held with chakra it is extremely hard to break at or near the same amount of chakra the user



~ chunin rank ~


Connecting gauze
Type: ninjutsu
Charka: 3,000
Rank: chunin
Connects the gauze to make the tentacles of gauze longer or as to make it one big piece of gauze.



shruiken gauze thrust
type: ninjutsu
chakra: 8,000
rank: chunin
binds shruiken to gauze and thrusts forth many from torso to strike enemy with enough force to cause a good stab wound


bansoko defence
type ninjutsu
chakra: 5,000
rank: chunin
user gathers chakra in there bandages and slam hand to the earth the gauze spins around the user to create a spinning shield and block most moves made by enemy



regeneritive gauze lvl 2
type ninjutsu
rank: chunin
chakra: 7,000
sacrafices gauze to heal injuries on self this move takes the rest of the day to heal ( sum stab wounds, lost eyes and fingers and toes ect. )

ultiment bansoko defence
type ninjutsu
rank chunin
chakra: 15,000
takes all gauze from body and forms it in the shape of a sphere if most taijutsu attacks are made upon this sphere the arm, leg, ect. are grabbed by the gauze and are wrapped up and now able to be counter attacked


Increase this to 15k. And it should only resist taijutsu based on the description. You can rp ninjutsu from a weaker shinobi being blocked by it, but if a stronger one attacks you, the shield is through.


1,000 blade fist
Type : ninjutsu
Chakra: 15,000
Rank: chunin
Takes the blade of a sword and by cutting yourself and putting blood on the blade combined with chakra destroys the blade. The blade then becomes a orb of metal and chakra the orb is used to cut right though stone if able to hold it the orb will not hurt the user (because the blood.) or his gauze but anything else it comes in contact with it will.


~ANBU~
Mindmare
Type genjutsu
Chakra: 20,000
Rank ANBU
The user raps gauze around enemies head they enemy sees horrific images and cannot release using “kai” but has to physically pull the gauze off.
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2,000 blade fist
type ninjutsu
chakra: 15,000
rank ANBU
The most powerful attack a chunin learns.
mainly the same attack as the 1,000 but the orb conected to both hands and used to strike the enemy and still consumes only one sword.



~Jonin~
Power crushing gauze
Type: ninjutsu
Rank: jonin
Chakra: 17,000
Adds extra chakra into the gauze also though the chakra the attack hits the enemy causing damage to the internal ( bones, organs etc.[/quote]
I guess, technically. Just say that the gauze can wrap around body parts and be squeezed really hard with chakra. But you also have to say how hard it is to break.


10,000 blades
rank jonin
chakra: 27,000
unlke the 1,000 or 2,000 the user can put the orbs on his/her tenticals of gauze. and being able to put tham on up to ten tenticels and/ or hands


bandage arms
rank jonin
chakra 30,000
moves bandages into arms. these arms are not as strong defencivly as normal arms but act as a substitute. these arms can form hand seals and other uses as like an normal arm(s)quote]
Needs to be explained better. user can only have our more arms MAX and can be grown two times a thead any more and the jutsu will overwelm the user and cause serouse loss of extra charka.


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The bio is all fine, but that's almost just about it...


minor gauze buff
chakra: n/a
rank gennin
this ability acts as a small shock absorber taking about 5% out af an taijutsu attack.


DS Says: This one is fine. It's realistic, given the clan's abilities.


regeneritive gauze lvl 1
type ninjutsu
chakra n/a
rank gennin
sacrifices gauze to heal minor wounds on self the wounds at this level heal slowly at a two min sense these are small "wounds" ( cuts, bruises, scrapes ect )
DS Says: This is an acceptable attack, but the grammar in the attack description is unacceptable because it hinders the understanding of what the move does. You need capitalization and punctuation, as well as full sentences.


hidden wrap
type ninjutsu
chakra: 500
rank gennin
in one post the user sends the gauze into the ground the next post the move grabs a hidden tentecle of gauze grabs feet from ground. it is fairly easy to cutbut the users gauze would cut at about light shruiken throw would cut it.
DS Says:Alright, this is okay, but you have to change it to that a kick of the foot will break the hold. That way, it seems more like a 500 chakra technique. Also, capitalization would be nice.

Bansoko bunshin no jutsu
chakra 5,500
rank gennin
makes a shadow bandage clone by taking half of the gauze of the body and using it like a bunshin. once used the gauze returns to the user.
DS Says: Fix the spelling and grammar in this one. Basically do it in all of them. Cuz I'm getting a little tired of writing it over and over, lol. But this tech is okay because it's 5,500.


Bansoko kugutsu
Type: taijutsu
chakra: 7,500
rank gennin
After user has opponent in Bansoko kugutsu no jutsu, user throws opponent into air still holding onto with gauze and slams opponent onto the ground
DS Says:So does it wrap them in gauze first? Or does the gauze just grab them? Please clarify.



Bansoko shruiken
type ninjutsu
chakra: 2,500
Rank: genin
Folds gauze into shruiken shape and sharpened by chakra has though not as strond it is a good throwing weapon
DS Says: Change it to say that they MUST be thrown by hand. And it takes a five minute(in rp time) cooldown period to make one after every time you make five of them. This is because you could easily just make a bunch and throw them fast and then make more as soon as they run out.

total mummifacation
type ninjutsu
chakra: 10,000
rank genin
The highest move genin can do it makes the gauze rap around the enemy into like a gauze cocoon held with chakra it is extremely hard to break at or near the same amount of chakra the user
DS Says:Then say that if you have less chakra than your opponent, they can break out of it more easily. Aka, if you're a genin and you use it against a jounin, they could probably break out easily.


~ chunin rank ~


Connecting gauze
Type: ninjutsu
Charka: 3,000
Rank: chunin
Connects the gauze to make the tentacles of gauze longer or as to make it one big piece of gauze.
DS Says:I don't like this one.


shruiken gauze thrust
type: ninjutsu
chakra: 8,000
rank: chunin
binds shruiken to gauze and thrusts forth many from torso to strike enemy with enough force to cause a good stab wound
DS Says:This one is fine.


bansoko defence
type ninjutsu
chakra: 5,000
rank: chunin
user gathers chakra in there bandages and slam hand to the earth the gauze spins around the user to create a spinning shield and block most moves made by enemy
DS Says:The shield stays up for 2 posts, and then the amount of time it stays up increases by one post every 5,000 chakra. For example, at 10,000 chakra it would stay up for two posts plus the one post gained at 5,000 plus the one post gained at 10,000 meaning 4 posts. Also, say that you can't attack from inside of it.



regeneritive gauze lvl 2
type ninjutsu
rank: chunin
chakra: 7,000
sacrafices gauze to heal injuries on self this move takes the rest of the day to heal ( sum stab wounds, lost eyes and fingers and toes ect. )
DS Says:That's fine, but if you have unlimited gauze, how is it really a sacrifice?

ultiment bansoko defence
type ninjutsu
rank chunin
chakra: 15,000
takes all gauze from body and forms it in the shape of a sphere if most taijutsu attacks are made upon this sphere the arm, leg, ect. are grabbed by the gauze and are wrapped up and now able to be counter attacked
DS Says:Say that if the person using taijutsu has at least 2,000 more chakra than you, they can break through without being grabbed. And this should stay up for two posts, plus one for every 5,000 chakra gained AFTER 15,000. So at 20,000 chakra you could only keep it up for 3 posts.

1,000 blade fist
Type : ninjutsu
Chakra: 15,000
Rank: chunin
Takes the blade of a sword and by cutting yourself and putting blood on the blade combined with chakra destroys the blade. The blade then becomes a orb of metal and chakra the orb is used to cut right though stone if able to hold it the orb will not hurt the user (because the blood.) or his gauze but anything else it comes in contact with it will.
DS Says:This one doesn't make too much sense. HOw does a clan that deals with bandages gain the ability to destroy a metal orb with chakra?

~ANBU~
Mindmare
Type genjutsu
Chakra: 20,000
Rank ANBU
The user raps gauze around enemies head they enemy sees horrific images and cannot release using “kai” but has to physically pull the gauze off.
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DS Says:I love this one.



2,000 blade fist
type ninjutsu
chakra: 15,000
rank ANBU
The most powerful attack a chunin learns.
mainly the same attack as the 1,000 but the orb conected to both hands and used to strike the enemy and still consumes only one sword.
DS Says:Same problem as last time. It just doesn't fit with the chart.


~Jonin~
Power crushing gauze
Type: ninjutsu
Rank: jonin
Chakra: 17,000
Adds extra chakra into the gauze also though the chakra the attack hits the enemy causing damage to the internal ( bones, organs etc.
DS Says:Change it to say that you can make the gause squeeze really hard by usin chakra. But say how hard it is to get out, too.

10,000 blades
rank jonin
chakra: 27,000
unlke the 1,000 or 2,000 the user can put the orbs on his/her tenticals of gauze. and being able to put tham on up to ten tenticels and/ or hands
DS Says:Same problem as before.

bandage arms
rank jonin
chakra 30,000
moves bandages into arms. these arms are not as strong defencivly as normal arms but act as a substitute. these arms can form hand seals and other uses as like an normal arm(s).
DS Says: Needs to be explained better. user can only have four more arms MAX and can be grown two times a thead any more and the jutsu will overwhelm the user and cause serious loss of extra charka.

DS Says:You really really really really need to fix up the capitalization and grammar here. Also, you need moves saying how much gauze you can make at every level. Like, at 2,500 you should be able to make up to x meters of gauze before having to recharge for x number of posts or whatever. And then finally, you need to reorganize it so that the moves are in increasing order of chakra.

i fixed it up a little bit. tel me waht you think ds.