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|Naruto Jiyuu > Technique Chart/Bloodline Registration > Kaname bloodline|
|Posted by: NightFire Apr 23 2006, 07:13 PM|
| Clan Name: Kaname
Name of Bloodline Technique: Korusogane Eye
Description: A bloodline seemingly not far from that of the Sharingan. It is believed that at one point, the people of this line once shared a common relative with that of the Uchiha clan. Unlike the Uchiha, who's legendary sharingan is very well known, the Kaname have kept their Korusogane eye very well hidden.
Few in the Kaname clan ever used their korusogane eye, fearing others hatred of them, and possible killing of the members of the clan.Because of this, few ever mastered it and its true potential. But one member of the Kaname clan discovered it, and mastered its first level. His lust for power led him to leave his village, and become more powerful. But, he was tracked down, and killed.
So, his wife was forced to leave, carrying their unborn child, to the village hidden in the leaves, the only place that would take him. Now the Kaname clan call the village hidden in the leaves their home. Most shinobi from this family are of average strength, though they have hidden power that most of them never discover or use. Those that learn to use their Korusogane eye, tend to have even moreso than usual.
But, rather than flaunt themselves, this family prefers to try and keep normal lives. Or, at least normal for a shinobi.(NOTE: Please pm me if you wish to join in this clan. I am debating on how many that I will allow in it.)
|Posted by: Omega2042 Apr 23 2006, 11:42 PM|
| Now if you want to make a bloodline you will have to put more effort into it than a normal chart. You will need to make a history for the clan, it doesnt have to be long, but its needed to give an idea behind how old it is and how famous it is. You also have to say which village it is in.
As a tip, there really isnt enough here to make a strong clan. You might want to expand it and add a few more jutsus, but you dont have to.
|Posted by: NightFire Apr 23 2006, 11:52 PM|
| My plan was to add a couple more jutsu. I just was waiting for my mind to have some kind of burst of inspiration. So it isn't done yet. I forgot to put that in the thing. But, I am currently working on it.
Most likely I will have that burst during school tomarrow.
|Posted by: NightFire Apr 25 2006, 11:11 PM|
|Sorry for the double post, But I finished!!!|
|Posted by: Omega2042 Apr 27 2006, 01:46 AM|
| First of all the History is a bit off.
1) In 400 years its highly unlikely that only one person would be able to use it.
2) Villages want nothing else then to protect their bloodlines. Even if the members tend to be a bit crazy, they still would do everything they can to keep them.
Now onto the chart itself.
This just seems like a watered down Sharingan. You took off the ability to copy and changed what the eyes look like.
To save both of us some time here are the problems I have with this bloodline:
1) As stated above this is basically a weak Sharingan.
2) The jutsus in the chart are also similar in style to the Uchiha clan. With the exception of the one earth jutsu, which doesnt seem to fit in with the rest of it.
All in all it seems like a variation on the Uchiha clan.
|Posted by: NightFire Apr 27 2006, 09:16 PM|
| 1) I think it over and see what I can do
2)I talked to another admin, and he said it was fine that they have left their old village.
3)The point is supposed to be it's similarity to the Sharingan. In case you missed it, it says that it was thought at one point to have been closly related to that of the Sharingan. And I can take out the earth jutsu if need be.