My Works~, [Original]

HellO!

I'll post poems, and maybe stories I wrote. Maybe you guys out there who are reading could give me your comment on my work! So that I will sort of improve??

ANYWAY, just hope that you guys enjoy reading my works. Thanks~~!

This is my first poem. It's about Mother Nature.
Was doing my math, and suddenly it just struck me, and I wrote it out. That was 2 years ago.

Here's the poem:

I was once a beautiful young lady.
Full of life and spirit.
Yes, I was full of life, but lonely.
Then you came and took over me.
You cared for me and loved me dearly.

I have always wished to the shooting stars above,
that everything will remain as perfect.
But as we know,
not every wonderful thing lasts long.
I never once believed it.
But now,
I finally do.

One fateful day,
I felt so unwell.
I told you about it,
but you didn't seem to notice.
At first, I thought that you were too busy with your everyday life,
That you did not have the time to care for me.
To make things easier for you,
I gave you some hints.
But you didn't seem to understand,
nor bother to ask!

I felt dirty.
Rubbish was thrown all over me.
You fed me harmful chemicals,
which harmed me so badly.

There I was feeling really unwell,
You were still so busy.
Why?
What happened?
You are not like before!
I often wondered why.
Then, I finally understood.
You are greedy!
You are selfish!
You did not care anymore!
You created so many things to earn money,
that you no longer care about me.
I never felt so lonely.

I was hurt!
Badly hurt!
When I finally BURST out,
it was then that you realized it.
But it was almost all too late.
There is now a big hole in me.
It was then that you started to worry.
What's the point?
I am going to die soon.

Yes, you did try your best to save me,
but what about some of you?

How I wish time could turn back.
I really do.
Please help me!
Let me trust you one last time.
Let me believe that most things that are wonderful do last long.

The next poem was for a friend of mine. You could say that she's quite close to me. I mean, since I wrote her a poem.

Well...actually something happened between us, and I wanted to apologize to her. But at the same time, I don't want her to blame herself, since she's the type.


So here it is:

Friends are people
who leave a print on your path.

Friends are people
who stay with you when the ship sinks.

Friends are people
who give you a helping hand when you fell down.

Friends are people
who are willing to share your sorrow, pain and joy.

Friends are people
who reflect what you really are.

Friends are people
who care about you when you are sick.

Friends are people
who will not betray you for something else.

Friends are people
who speak up for you when you are bullied.

Friends are people
who listen and respect the decision you make.

Friends are people
who will fill your heart with happy memories.

Friends are people
who will think of how you feel.

Friends are people
who will not make you cry, at least, not the tears of sorrow.

Friends are people
who will never leave you alone to survive on you own.

And I am not a good friend for you.
I apologize for the tears.
I apologize for the way I treated you.
I am really sorry.

Hope that the meeting of you and me
is left behind as a wonderful dream.

Thank you for being my friend.
Thank you for being there for me when I needed you.
Thank you.

Thumbs up to the first poem you wrote ! hell yeah ! : )
it was like a diary while I was reading it.. I'm envy you.. You had the time to post it off..

Thank you!!

Write something. Maybe you will come up with something really good!! You never know~

And thanks for taking the time to read.

WOW!!! you should post more~!!! i luved your poems!

Thanks!!

Thank you!!

Write something. Maybe you will come up with something really good!! You never know~

And thanks for taking the time to read.

hEY ! Looks like people your works eh !
I finally posted off something in writer's corner too !

http://z9.invisionfree.com/Intercross/inde...?showtopic=2627

Ihope that link would work. :] YAY ! Let's keep on writing !