Act XVI

[Luminaire]

It's been two months since I finished Act XV, so it's high time I released another. PDF and wiki as always.

I'm afraid that the next act may not be released for an even longer period of time. Classes for me start Wednesday, and I've got an unbelievably full load this semester, so bear with me if this gets crowded out for a while.

[Tai001]

This Act is quite good. I thought you did Dalton very well. And the dialouge for this act is especially good. Though I have some comments I wish to make.

1. Isn't Magus supposed to have light blue hair? But this act states he has white hair. It's not a big deal, I just tend to like adaptions to be accurate.

2. Schala asks Magus, and I quote, "What has happened to you?". Does this mean she figured out that he was Janus? Becuase what she just said does not make sense otherwise.

But anyway, I am very pleased with this act. I can hardly wait for more of this script in the future, reading as the story unfolds. But I can understand how you will be quite busy thanks to school. So thanks for this wonderful read.

TTFN, Ta ta for now.

[Luminaire]

My intention was for Schala to recognize that the prophet was the older Janus, and to reveal this near the end of the Ocean Palace sequence. The scene in this act was meant to hint at it but not completely reveal it. When I get to the Ocean Palace part I may revise how I do this somewhat.

As for the color of Magus's hair, that was probably just a mistake on my part.